Socom Rap

[baby.j.3.s.u.s]

nice johnny

[Brandon]

Sweet song! I downlaoded it and everyone at my school says good job and we can't wait for more!

[dialtone]

Don't take this as flaming, more like constructive criticism but man that was hot poop right there. You sounded like your typical white kid wanting to be black (wigger) trying to be apart of the rap game. Now for some positives, not all rhymes were horrible and uncreative just most of them and you could have even made the hot poo stink less if you would have thrown a beat in there to spit along with even if it was a rough copy. I'd personally say dump it in the can and do a rewrite and this time flow to a beat but if you want to stick with this there's still tons to be done to freshen up this spit. Again don't take this too seriously its just one mans opinion/suggestions and every other post on this thread seems to on the other side of the fence, just hope your not deleting any of the other quote 'negative' posts about this spit :D Good luck bro.

[JohnnyMcKinney]

Don't take this as flaming, more like constructive criticism but man that was hot poop right there. You sounded like your typical white kid wanting to be black (wigger) trying to be apart of the rap game. Now for some positives, not all rhymes were horrible and uncreative just most of them and you could have even made the hot poo stink less if you would have thrown a beat in there to spit along with even if it was a rough copy. I'd personally say dump it in the can and do a rewrite and this time flow to a beat but if you want to stick with this there's still tons to be done to freshen up this spit. Again don't take this too seriously its just one mans opinion/suggestions and every other post on this thread seems to on the other side of the fence, just hope your not deleting any of the other quote 'negative' posts about this spit :D Good luck bro.

I liked my first one better:
http://www.consolediscussions.com/fo...estyle-t16708/

[_L96AW_RUSTY_]

Beautiful. Good job ahaha ;)